Rough Cut 1 with Feedback

What works well: Good variety of camera shots, the camera is controlled well, good locations and mise considered. Good lighting.

Even Better if: You made the narrative a little clearer – it is not clear about the two narratives running alongside each other! Add in sound and make the diegetic sound clearer – it does not look like the speech matches up with the sound! Consider how your film will start – where will it go? Add in institutional logos and titles


Lilly.